There are many things that makes up happy, but what are the little things in life that always makes us a hug, food, or our friends and family? Or is it our pride for our country ? Getting a hug from the person that makes you happy feels great. I would choose personal relations are more important for humans to bond together as human beings. Personal relations is more important than patriotism in my opinion.
What is patriotism? Well when people hear patriotism they think it about having pride in their country where they were born and raised. Also they need to be a big fan and know everything what happen in their country. However not many people know the history of the United State or can even name all the previous president like I can't even name them even though I'm in school and taking history. They just know what mostly everybody knows. For example they all know the holidays like Thanksgiving, Fourth of July, and other holidays, but most people won't know the real reasons why we have or got those holidays. If we went up to random people and ask them questions about America history they wouldn't really know them.
The things that they have in common like they both have to do with love. Love for something that makes you happy and love for your country. Love can't be different but you can love different things however love will always be the same affection towards something. Yet though one is to get form together as one with bonds and the other is to form everybody as a whole for the pride of the country. Both similar for bonding, but for different purpose.
In conclusion I agree with E.M. Forster's view that personal relations is more important than patriotism. There more personal relations involve in our lives and not a lot of patriotism only once in a while when something big happens.Patriotism is good to show our love for our country, but we can't always really grow it. Personal relations is more meaningful that we want to grow and bloom.
Enjoyed reading your essay, it made me think about the way I wrote my essay and how I could make it better.
ReplyDeleteYour hook and thesis statement caught my attention immediately, but in the first paragraph you need to work on wording. Overall, it was a pretty good essay, it was interesting and made me want to read more.
ReplyDeleteHey Alexis, you had a good hook and you had a thesis statement, the only thing I would check for would be your mechanics and the way you worded your sentences. Overall I enjoyed reading your essay.
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